BAD COFFEE: 2nd draft script

Yesterday I had my second meeting with Andrija in regards to the 1st draft script we worked, that I mentioned in the last post, and it was an insightful two and a half hours just running by the script and seeing what could/needed to be changed and what was good and we wanted to keep.

At first, me and Andrija had different views on what should be changed from the script as she was very attached to the original story that her writer came up with but bit by bit we came to an understanding and realized that there were some parts that could be optimized and enhanced.

This was already the 2nd draft we were looking at and the parts that still were a bit of an issue to me were the scenes, right at the beginning and then is a recurrence throughout it, where Tuck is still seen talking to herself. I’ve always felt that if we were to showcase her doing that, then the tone of the film would already be set from the get go and Tuck would either be seen as someone who suffers from a mental disorder or that the audience would quite easily later on realize that she should actually be talking to Ashley. And that is something I felt needed to be “under wraps”, so to speak, for a little while longer to leave the audience wondering for just a little while longer!

The next thing that we eventually had to come to a consensus was that Andrija wanted, very much so, to keep in the story the location of the coffee shop as she felt it was fundamental to the story and good break in between the other locations used. Whereas I felt, at the start, that we could easily change that location and make the actions that happen there, happen at Tuck’s house.

But the settlement we found is that we nearly eliminate all of the “walking path” scenes, leaving it to just one in the whole story, which overall minimizes the amount of locations we’d need in the script and would give us some extra time that we could spend on any of the other locations.

Another issue we tackled was that in this new draft, more characters were introduced which again I felt like it would just take away from Tuck and Ashley’s storyline so we managed to cut them down a bit.

As of right now, our new updated of the script are very exciting and we both are liking where the story is headed!

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