ORANGE GIRL: Meeting about 1st script draft issues

Today, me and Jonas met for the first time after he finished the first draft of the script and since the overall result of it was not something I felt right to the storyline, we wanted to discuss it before we had a meeting with Helen, later in the day.

The issues I had with this draft of the script were that not only did the script not make sense with what we’ve been discussing prior but also we it lacked the climax (being the secret that Aiste shares with Jonas) as well as it sounding more like a drama than a documentary.

During the meeting I laid out again and more firmly what I felt the script had it wrong and what was lacking and managed to explain my point of view on it and what I felt needed to be changed and/or improved on.

Jonas obviously defended his script but also understood where I was coming from.

The issue that we are now facing goes again back to the ethics that revolves around having someone, this being Aiste, discussing their on-going and still very present issue of possessing and suffering from an eating disorder.

Jonas tells me she might not feel comfortable having that being discussed with him let alone on film, which raises the issue of that being an integral part of the documentary in and of itself.

So, my idea is to have a back plan on what we can use as a replacement in the storyline that will help us when we are on location shooting the film.

After we meet Helen, later today, I’ll blog about her thoughts and the feedback we get to effectively do these changes in the best way possible.


BAD COFFEE: Crowdfunding ideas + 4th script draft

Today I had a meeting with Andrija, my director, as I wanted to discuss the possibility of enhancing our idea of doing crowdfunding for our film with the addition of a ‘fan-made’ trailer (if you will), of how we envision the story to be.

This idea came after yesterday’s crowdfunding workshop where it was introduced to our entire class, the MDX Crowdfunding platform and how we can use it to reach not only students from our course, but the entire university body along with potential alumni.

This peaked my interest, as we need all the help we can get!

So, I discussed with her the idea of creating a trailer where we could used clips of different films and TV shows where we could introduce the characters of Tuck and Ashley (through the use of other characters of other film/TV series) and showcase their relationship, how it evolves and eventually disintegrates. This could peak not only the audience’s interest but also make them eager to participate, in whatever way possible, in helping this film come to life.

I then enlisted this assignment to Andrija and Mariana, the editor, to have it done in a week’s time – 4th December.

Plus, we already have a 4th draft of the script.

BAD COFFEE: 2nd draft script

Yesterday I had my second meeting with Andrija in regards to the 1st draft script we worked, that I mentioned in the last post, and it was an insightful two and a half hours just running by the script and seeing what could/needed to be changed and what was good and we wanted to keep.

At first, me and Andrija had different views on what should be changed from the script as she was very attached to the original story that her writer came up with but bit by bit we came to an understanding and realized that there were some parts that could be optimized and enhanced.

This was already the 2nd draft we were looking at and the parts that still were a bit of an issue to me were the scenes, right at the beginning and then is a recurrence throughout it, where Tuck is still seen talking to herself. I’ve always felt that if we were to showcase her doing that, then the tone of the film would already be set from the get go and Tuck would either be seen as someone who suffers from a mental disorder or that the audience would quite easily later on realize that she should actually be talking to Ashley. And that is something I felt needed to be “under wraps”, so to speak, for a little while longer to leave the audience wondering for just a little while longer!

The next thing that we eventually had to come to a consensus was that Andrija wanted, very much so, to keep in the story the location of the coffee shop as she felt it was fundamental to the story and good break in between the other locations used. Whereas I felt, at the start, that we could easily change that location and make the actions that happen there, happen at Tuck’s house.

But the settlement we found is that we nearly eliminate all of the “walking path” scenes, leaving it to just one in the whole story, which overall minimizes the amount of locations we’d need in the script and would give us some extra time that we could spend on any of the other locations.

Another issue we tackled was that in this new draft, more characters were introduced which again I felt like it would just take away from Tuck and Ashley’s storyline so we managed to cut them down a bit.

As of right now, our new updated of the script are very exciting and we both are liking where the story is headed!

The Theory Of Everything: Review


This film recounts the story of Stephen Hawking from the moment he meets his wife Jane until the moment he receives the honour of meeting the Queen of England after many years and numerous books and lectures being published and acknowledged world wide.

But the thing that captured my attention was that the film obviously addresses Hawking’s struggle with dealing and coming to terms with his neurological deficiency at the same time that it shows the impact that that has on Jane.


As his capacity to walk, talk, dress and eat on his own becomes increasingly affected, Jane steps in almost as an extension of Hawking himself as to care for him and helping to make his life as normal and as easy as possible. She becomes quite literally his back bone.

And it is astonishing to see how she dealt with it all. I mean she married him knowing what laid ahead because she loved him. Truly and completely. There is no denying of that fact.


Which only comes to showcase that the film tells the story not of Hawking’s ascent into professional stardom despite is illness (although that is still shown) but of Jane Hawking’s increasing descent into unhappiness due to the overwhelming notion that after having to take care of three children with no physical help from her husband due to his own inability to do so, having had to take care of a household in all manners, juggling to finish her PhD in Medieval Spanish Poetry  and the added bonus of having to take care of her husband, only came to an inevitable halt because the combination of all of that mixed with Stephen’s increasing expeditions to other countries either to receive awards or to give lectures, led them to drift apart emotionally.


This led to her falling in love with the conductor of a church choir, Jonathan whom helped the family a great deal whilst Jane and Hawking still tried to mend their marriage which even led to a third pregnancy on her part. But the increasing difficulties continued even after a full time nurse came to take care of Hawking, only leading to him having a slight infatuation with her.

theory-everything-reviews-charlie-cox So I would say that the film is a brilliant depiction of how love can truly transcend the boundaries of disease, no matter of what level, and it can bring you up or take you further down depending on how you choose to live your life.

Stephen Hawking is without a doubt an incredibly inspiring man, not only because of his work but also of how he chose to live his life. Free of self imposed boundaries or of stereotypes imposed by society on how you should act or be seen by a major audience. He continues to change the world just by living. 

But then again, it is often overlooked that he only managed to accomplish so much because Jane was by his side every step of the way. Unwavering and strong.

It is undoubtedly a beautiful biographical film with a strong human facet.

Rating: 8/10



The Hunger Games: Catching Fire


Yesterday I went to see the sequel to the worldwide famous “The Hunger Games”, and I honestly didn’t go with the idea of it being very good because even though the first one wasn’t bad, it still didn’t amaze me or made me feel as emotionally invested as I thought it would. But alas, it was a good film! Surprisingly so. I had read the book previsouly to have seen either of them and I have to say that the director and screenwriter have stayed up until now very loway to the books which pleases the fans. And for people who haven’t read them, then can still understand the storyline and relate to some of the characters. Now this in this film, we see a completly different Katniss. She is not the defenseless (well she was never really ‘defenseless’ but you know what I mean) little girl we saw in the first one who had no hope of surviving in the feared Hunger Games and yet she surprised everyone, most of all herself when she surpassed every single obstacle that came her way. And we can see how that eventually came to affect her in this sequel. We see her battle a somewhat post-traumatic disorder, where she has hallucination of the people she killed in the arena. Young kids, just like her. She sees them all the time, in her sleep and when she feels most troubled in her waking state. But out of all of them, the one she never forgets and that haunts her the most is the memory of Rue. The little girl who was her ally in the first film, and the one she couldn’t save from the hands of another tribute who killed her in cold blood. She never forgave herself, and probably never will, and it’s with that regret that when she apologizes for Rue’s untimely death to her family in District 11, when the Victory Tour commences, an old man just lifts of his hand with the three fingers lifted in a sign of respect, admiration, love, but most of all of revolution. That simple gesture triggers a whole series of events throughout the film, because that is where you see the first signs of the eminent revolution begin within the districts and the Capitol itself. We see Katniss trying to overcame everything and everyone that tries to break her down. Yet we do see her mental state starting to progressively start to deteriorate through the film and is it an incredible journey to be able to accompany. Later, when they existing victors are all reaped once again to fight till the death in a new version of the Games, we see the alliances form and we see that this time around, they all know what they need to do to win. Yet, this time it’s not about one of them winning. No. It’s about saving Katniss. Why? Because she’s the mockingjay. She’s the symbol of hope. The beacon of an eminent revolution to, finally, take down the power of the Capitol once and for all. and if she dies, the hope dies with her. So some of the victors have been assembled so their sole purpose within the Games is to protect Katniss at all costs. Even if it means losing their own lives in the process. This is all happening without Katniss having the slightest clue because they all know that if she knew, that was going on, that they were trying ti save her life instead of Peeta’s or someone else’s then things would have been very different. So we embark on this journey of pain, loss, fear and hope. I also quite enjoyed that in this movie they focused a lot on psychological pain rather than the physical part. We see the deterioration of the character’s mental states. The scene when Katniss and Finnick hear in the jaberjays the screams of pain of their loves one’s, specifically Prim (Katniss’s little sister) and Annie (Finnick’s beloved), we see the extent of how “damaged” they both are. And it is thrilling and very emotionally intense to watch, even if it is just on screen, people go through that.

So I can definitely day that The Hunger Games: Catching Fire was a very enjoyable experience and that Jennifer Lawrence was definitely the star in it without a doubt.