ORANGE GIRL: Meeting about 1st script draft issues

Today, me and Jonas met for the first time after he finished the first draft of the script and since the overall result of it was not something I felt right to the storyline, we wanted to discuss it before we had a meeting with Helen, later in the day.

The issues I had with this draft of the script were that not only did the script not make sense with what we’ve been discussing prior but also we it lacked the climax (being the secret that Aiste shares with Jonas) as well as it sounding more like a drama than a documentary.

During the meeting I laid out again and more firmly what I felt the script had it wrong and what was lacking and managed to explain my point of view on it and what I felt needed to be changed and/or improved on.

Jonas obviously defended his script but also understood where I was coming from.

The issue that we are now facing goes again back to the ethics that revolves around having someone, this being Aiste, discussing their on-going and still very present issue of possessing and suffering from an eating disorder.

Jonas tells me she might not feel comfortable having that being discussed with him let alone on film, which raises the issue of that being an integral part of the documentary in and of itself.

So, my idea is to have a back plan on what we can use as a replacement in the storyline that will help us when we are on location shooting the film.

After we meet Helen, later today, I’ll blog about her thoughts and the feedback we get to effectively do these changes in the best way possible.


“Lamentation” short film: Final year project

This is my final year film project for our main module and it’s called “Lamentation”. It was based in an original script written by one of my classmates which I produced.

It was an amazing experience from the beginning all the way to the final product. A lot of hard work and love came into creating it so hopefully you guys will enjoy it as well.

The synopsis is as follows:

Donald, an elderly pensioner in London, has been living the past year as a widower. His wife’s favourite flower was a white rose and throughout the film Donald sees this flower in places that it isn’t really there. In the end, Donald comes to accept that his wife is gone by finding comfort in the memories he shared with her.

Scriptwriting: genre, characters and ideas



Our teacher has set out for us to create an original 8-10 page script for our final year assignment. Tough cookie, this one.

As the world is my oyster, I set out to trying to, first of all, decide what genre I wanted my story to centre around so that after deciding on that I could move on and decipher what story am I going to tell.

So after a while of thinking about what I would like to write about and having been watching films and television shows in hopes of finding inspiration, it finally struck me.

The genre I am going to focus on is suspense/thriller. For me, this is one of the best genres in storytelling as the storyline always follows with the unexpected in ways that, as a viewer, you wouldn’t think about. The being one step ahead of the audience is something very compelling and what drew me to it.

Currently, the way I am dividing all of my ideas follows the rules that were set out by Tom Lazarus’s book “The Last Word – Definitive Answer To All Your Screenwriting Questions”.

In it, Lazarus explains is technique of dealing with the downpour of ideas that can happen at any point and as a way of being prepared, as to not forget anything, for future notice is to divide his ideas in different documents titled: Characters, Scenes, Ideas and Miscellaneous. And he encouraged to not limit yourself and to just write down anything and everything that comes to mind in regards to the story as it might be something amazing to work with later on.

So this is how I started, I started to write down specific elements like: man, retired, gardening, michael, basketball, dolls, monopoly, house, planting flowers in the garden, Scottish, etc.

I just let all my ideas flow uninterrupted, always having the main focus of the genre in the back of my mind.

So I am now going to work through all that I’ve written and will get back to you as soon as I have another update.

See you soon!

Screenwriting 101


Screenwriting is a topic approached by many different authors and scriptwriters alike who have their specific ways in approaching an idea and to transform into script format.

But there a few tips that are common knowledge to anyone who likes to write. Especially if that someone has the ambition to write for the big screen, television or even theatre.

My teacher presented these tips with us in class and I would like to share it with you.

They are as follows:

  1. Do your homework. This means that whatever the topic you choose to centre your story around, you must know everything about it! Know the underlining theme, the reasoning behind your characters’ personality traits, how the world of your story came to be – basically you need to know anything and everything that exists in your script as everything needs to be there for a reason.
  2. Be careful with “on the nose dialogue”. A lot of the greatest scripts in movie history, centre more around the visual aspect of a story more so than dialogue. This is because dialogue is thought to be quite overrated by some of the most prestigious film makers such as Alfred Hitchcock. A story can function well with having zero to no dialogue as long as the combinations of all of the other elements in it still are able to portray a compelling and engaging story for the audience. In summary, using dialogue is a good thing as long as you don’t completely spell out everything that the character is thinking and/or feeling when you should rather show it.
  3. Be aware of the audience. When writing a story, any story, that will be presented to an audience even if that audience is your family or your closest friends, you need to be aware of what the reader’s perception of the story is. Basically, as the author, you need to always be one step ahead of the audience because their reaction will determine if your script is going to rise in glory or fail miserably.
  4. Don’t “play the aces too early”. I know you want to make your story the most epic and engaging one possible. But all the excitement behind starting to write a new script that you believe is amazing, might very well cloud your judgement for the most basic knowledge, don’t introduce the biggest climax of your story too soon. That will probably set the expectations of the reader too high when the rest of the story is just plain and simple from then on. Their interest will decrease to non-existence if that would be the case.
  5. Only write what you can “see”. This seems like something very simple to follow through, but the reality is not thus. I have fallen into this mistake many times and it is surprisingly easy to do without noticing. When you are writing a plot where the main characters finds himself in an unknown venue and he is methodically looking around and trying to decipher each detail of the location as to measure where he might be. In this case, you need to be careful and mindful that you can only write what the character is “seeing” not what he is “feeling internally” as that meddles into his emotional feelings or even his back story that you can’t show in screen.
  6. REWRITE. When you think that your script is perfect and you are ready to share it with the world, it’s because it’s probably not perfect and you’re setting yourself off to failure. There is probably some spelling error, repeated words, sentences that don’t make sense or even part of the dialogue for an important scene is missing. Meaning that you need to look over everything and maybe even send it to a couple other people so they can fact-check it for you.

Hopefully this is helpful to some of you!